The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

邵教授解析

1. 圖中20個數據,是不是都要寫?

我們得定義這個「寫」的意思。

1) 不用具體把每一個數字都列舉出來,但是

2) 只選擇一些國家來寫,或者

3) 一些國家只寫產電量不寫用電量(或者反過來),都是不行的。

所謂不用把每個數據列舉出來,是說一些數據可以打包處理——比如給一個區間(考鴨要自己找到上限和下限)。但是,只有接近的數據才能放到一個區間內

2. 如何劃分主體段?

常見的分段方法是,將數據接近的寫到一段。但是,這樣就會導致一個主體段特別短(4個數據),另一個主體段特別長(16個數據)。所以,這個題目例外,建議前五和後五個國家各分一段。這樣,對應的2個主體段字數就會差不多

3. 要寫的 comparisons 有哪些?

comparisons 是考鴨作文特別容易遺漏的信息,接下來會進行逐一列舉

1) 產電量和用電量最大(特別大)的國家

2) 每個國家產電量和用電量的差異,都不大

3) 產電量和用電量的差異,只有 Germany 產電少於用電

4) Russia 產電量和用電量最接近(考慮寫,因為題目信息太多,建議次要信息都不寫)

英國老師範文

開頭段

The bar chart presents data relating to the quantities of electricity (measured in billions of kilowatts per hour) produced and used in 2014 by the ten countries in the world that produce and use the greatest amount of electricity.

主體段1:總體的對比

It is clear that China and the USA are the biggest producers and users of electricity by far. Except for Germany, all the countries in question produce more electricity than they use, though the differences are generally not large.

主體段2:前五個國家的數據

China and the USA produced around 5,400 billion kWh and around 4,100 billion kWh of electricity respectively. Further, both nations used only fractionally less than this sum. Russia, Japan and India occupied positions three, four and five in the top ten, with corresponding consumption figures [ranging between 1,057 billion and 871 billion] with respect to generation and ranging [from 1,038 billion to just under 700 billion] for usage.

主體段3:後五個國家的數據

The final five places in the top ten were occupied (in descending order) by Canada, France, Brazil, Germany and the Republic of Korea. The spread of both production and usage figures was [approximately 620 billion to around 450 billion]. Canada, France and Brazil were notable in that their production quantities were all at least 75 billion higher than their usage figures. In contrast, Germany consumed about 60 billion more than it produced.

[ ] 部分,使用了給範圍的方法,將數據打包處理。即便如此,文章字數還是超過了200。

重點辭彙

1) fractional

Very small; insignificant

fractionally=slightly

2) spread

The extent or limit to which something is or can be spread


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